By Alejandra Metcalf
Yes. This story was certainly weird. But, I couldn’t stop reading it to see what happened next. There’s a lot for me to like about this story. The characters are written well, the dialogue isn’t bad, and the premise is just interesting. So, let’s delve right in.
An interesting thing about this story is the use of previous literary works. I really like that. Metcalf definitely has an understanding of them as well. Which is why this incorporation of difficult pieces of fiction works so well. In order to write well, you have to know what you’re writing about. If you read books on writing, such as On Writing by Stephen King or Consider This by Chuck Palahniuk, you’ll see that in order for them to write about a topic they study it. Sometimes interviewing family or friends about it. This kept me intrigued, and was a big part of what made want to keep reading.
The humor is perfect in this story. It’s a very dry humor, and for two people that just got transported to an era that they could literally be killed in, it certainly fits. I will say, though, they aren’t nearly as in shock as I would be if I were just transported to a new world from just playing a game. Lith and Vain certainly handle it well. Which, brings me to another point. The names don’t really fit the story. Lith and Vain seem like fantasy names. Yes, the story is about getting transported to Camelot and they go on a fantasy adventure. I get that. But it starts out in normal times, in the real world. And while their names are interesting, I don’t think they quite fit with the story.
Character and dialogue are presented really well in this story. Each character has a unique personality, and when Lith says, “Her grin hinted that she might not have been as wasted as I had pegged her as before,” is a great description of Cassidy. You just start thinking, “Cassidy, you sly dog!” It really is a great line for how simple it is. Lith is certainly set to be a great character, one that you can root for in the end to get back to the real world. And, if they were to kill Cassidy, well, you would hope that they would get away with it. Vain also seems like a good support character, like Samwise Gamgee.
I gave this story 3.5 stars. This story has about 1,200 words left to build on, and I think building the world around them would have been a great use of those 1,200 words. Possibly lifted it up to a 4 or 5 star range. Nonetheless, this was a really interesting story that was written really well.
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